Noelle

Hi there! First thing I want to mention is that you say Rease's name five times in the first two paragraphs. That's a bit too much. I mean, there isn't ...

Hi there! Wow, what nice grandparents she has. All they want out of life from her is to pull the weeds in the front yard. Yup, they're keepers! *insert eye ...

Hi there! In my room there was my Red Oak wardrobe which held all of my gowns and shoes, my dress which held my underwear and fitters . M y ...

Hi there! She stood over the toilet, looking at the silver coloured watch her mom gave her. 6 o'clock, exactly one week since her dad died. Okay, so my main ...

Hi there! She sat in on the swingset outside the grey house. I know that Willow already pointed out this part, but I have something else to say about it. ...

Hi there! Among the disgruntled pigeons perched on the edges of the rooftops laid a slender girl with dull brown hair. She swung her legs as she watched the dots ...

Hi there! THE WORLD AROUND HIM was a blur of colors of different shades . I think using both 'blur of color' and 'different shades' is a bit too much. ...

Hi there! I can feel his head snapping back with the force of his laughter. I can feel the air reverberate with it, come alive with the sound of it. ...

Hi there! Whoa, wait, I didn't review this already?? I definitely thought I did...weird. Anyways, another great chapter here. I think that I enjoy reading this from Asteria and Frey's ...

Hi there! Oh gosh, oh gosh. That last paragraph. Holy crap, I can't get over it! Lian and Ari?? Perfect I swear. I love it! Okay, enough fangirling for me ...

Hi there! Wow, talk about suspense! What a way to end the prologue. Here you were building up the suspense throughout and then bam we're hit with that ending. What ...

Hi there! She has the prettiest black hair and blue eyes and ever since she saved me from those mean- jock kids a lunch when they tried to take my ...

Hi there! So I was hanging out in the Green Room and found this. How come no one has reviewed this?? But it doesn't matter 'cause I'm here to give ...

Hi there! I let out a laugh at her before I put moisturizer on my face and dried my hair. Usually when someone "lets out a laugh" it's just a ...

Hi there! May I say that I absolutely adore the final line of this? Because seriously, it's awesome. It's just two simple words, but it's so darn powerful. Especially after ...