Noelle

Hi there! This is a really good start. I'm definitely intrigued by this and I want to know more. Just like HereBeMonsters (cool name!) said before me, there's no spelling ...

Hi there! Wow, this is just...I really don't know how to describe this. It's most definitely disturbing. You did a great job describing the main character's feelins. I could feel ...

Hi there! Welcome to the site! I'll start off by saying that this definitely pulled me into this stroy. You did a good job giving us enough details to keep ...

Hi there! I really like this. I was rapping it in my mind while I was reading it! :D It's pretty awesome how your words flow together. This has a ...

Hi there! I disagree with what everyone said before me (sorry all you who got here before me). Sure, the vocabulary is a little simple, but it doesn't need to ...

Hi there! This chapter was pretty good. I feel like you could've added more to the story, though. At the beginning, I expected this to be about Lee's inner struggle ...

Hi there! I enjoyed reading this poem. It has good imagery and I can definitely feel the emotion in this. The flow of this is good too, there's not place ...

Hi there! Well, to be honest, I'm completely confused. I'm not really sure what this is about or why you wrote it. But, I guess it's supposed to be that ...

Hi there! Wow, this is a really great piece! I can really feel the emotion in this. You did a great job really describing this situation and really digging deep ...

Hi there! First off I want to let you know that your avatar is EPIC! I really like it. :) Anyway, this poem is pretty epic in itself. There's not ...

Hi there! Lee began to pack up her old and worn sleeping bag, ignoring the disapproving ogles of passer byes . I'm not sure that you should use the word ...

Hi there! Just to let you know, I was very excited to read this. Really, I was! And I just wanted to say that it definitely lived up to the ...

Hi there! Wow, this is great! I really love it! *clicks like button* As Blue said before me, this sounds just like a psalm. You did a good job with ...

Hi there! It was magic, the way they gripped each other, I love this. It's a great description of what the kid thought about the blocks. Sure when we're older, ...

Hi there! Welcome to the site! This is a great start. There's a lot of description in this chapter, no dialouge, but it all works out fine. Speaking of that, ...