Noelle

Hi there! A belated welcome to the site ^_^ 1. I like the stuff about the soul flowers; it's interesting. I think it's fine at the beginning of the novel. ...

Hi there! Nothing was wrong with me. Despite what the doctors said. "Perfectly healthy" were the words the doctors had used the day of my birth. These sentences don't make ...

Hi there! I absolutely love your writing. Just wanted to say that ^_^ This may just be my writing style, but I feel like the "she dreamed this" should be ...

Hi there! I apologize in advance for this review being so short. Hopefully I'll give you some sort of substance in there. I really like this chapter. You seem to ...

Hi there! The first thing I notice is three big paragraphs. There's nothing wrong with large paragraphs, but with this being a short story it's a bit much. Read it ...

Hi there! Someone once told me (don't remember who or where) that the first time you mention a character in a chapter it should be by name. The reason for ...

Hi there! I totally relate to the whole thunderstorm thing. Love them. So the girl crashing into the house. It happens kind of suddenly. I understand that that's the whole ...

Hi there! I'm back to review finally I'm a bit thrown off by the "snow that shot up his nostrils" description. If he's just come to, I don't think the ...

Hi there! I'm doing this review on my phone so I apologize I'm advance for any formatting issues or autocorrect fails. Loud footsteps could be heard from behind him. Saying ...

Hi there! I'll forewarn you, I don't have much to say about this chapter. It's a pretty solid chapter and gives us some more background about the zoo. I like ...

Hi there! Oh dear, I have a lot of chapters to catch up on. The first two paragraphs can be combined. Dialogue can come in the middle of a paragraph ...

Hi there! The large orange sun slowly sank behind a mountain of hills in the distance. As the sun set beyond the horizon the once hot brown sand takes on ...

Hi there! I saw your newest chapter and was interested so I figured I'd start from the beginning :) I have a bit of a qualm about Ana's name here. ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a review day review. I think this is a great first chapter. You have some good characterization in here even though we only really get ...

Hi there! Noelle here to review your awesome novel. This reminds me of Madagascar. I know no one wants to hear their piece compared to something else, but I feel ...