-
Re: It is love
Well I'm not usually one for these sorts of poems but I quite liked this one. I particularly liked the way you coupled the ideas of love and hate; stark ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Sighs
Good use of imagery and I like the build up of the semantic field of darkness at the beginning (it is said that this is an unconcious thing so you ...
Sep 29, 2008 -
Re: Yearning to Know You
I'm in agreement with everyone else here, although I do really like the concept of describing different emotional dispositions. Greatly lacking is a use of imagery: 'clueless' is perhaps the ...
May 4, 2008 -
Re: What's This Feeling?
Nice use of imagery but just a few things to comment on... Heart racing Adrenalin rushing Total excitement-- Perhaps a semi-colon after 'racing' and a colon after 'rushing' would make ...
May 4, 2008 -
Re: As I struggle, you kick me when I'm down
I'm not great with love poems so I too found this one particularly over the top. The rhyme scheme is slightly erratic: you establish one at the beginning and then ...
May 3, 2008 -
Re: Again
I'm, not usually one for love poems, but this one sucked me in quite nicely. Lovely use of imagery here: As the golden sun sends pastel pinks across the sky ...
May 3, 2008 -
Re: A difficult dad
I personally quite like the vagueness, it forces the reader to formulate their own interpretation; I do agree with Vernon, in that you have to show rather than tell. Some ...
May 3, 2008 -
Re: Breaking Through
I'm in agreement with most, the idea isn't terribly original but the vines are a good image especially when it comes to restrictions in everyday life. Although I couldn't directly ...
May 3, 2008
