Nightshade

I liked this a lot. The writing does a great job of conveying emotion, and there are a lot of unique images and descriptions in here. Like writewatiwant, I felt ...

I enjoyed this. I've always loved forest imagery, and you do a good job of painting a picture with your words. I was somewhat disappointed with the last three lines ...

This story has continued to hold my interest. There are some subtle things in this chapter that I really appreciated. The transition between the old man being mysterious and and ...

Hi Ben, welcome to YWS. I would suggest trying this poem without a rhyme scheme. While reading it, I frequently got the impression that you were focused more on rhyming ...

You have a good idea here, but this poem didn't do it for me. Your enjambment didn't seem to serve a purpose and ended up making the poem choppy to ...

You are quite talented with description. Your writing allows the reader to completely visualize everything that is happening. I particularly liked how you described the night itself as being bruised. ...

You have some really interesting ideas and images in here. The sorrowful umbrella and waterfall of crystals really stood out to me as being unique. The last line's wording felt ...

This is a very powerful piece. You clearly put a lot of emotion into writing this, and you've made it so that the reader can pull out that emotion and ...

I really enjoyed this poem. I've never read the book, but it still held my interest, which says a lot. You did a good job of making your rhymes flow ...

The last stanza really made this poem for me. The idea that the abused are standing right among us and we ignore them is a deeply moving one. I also ...

Hi element, interesting poem. You do a good job of setting a scene and conveying a mood. I had some problem with your rhyme scheme, as it seems to go ...

I immediately liked this poem after my first read-through. The multiple meanings and the richness of forest imagery have a lot of potential. I like some of the repetition of ...

There's some good imagery in this poem. You clearly are talented with arranging and choosing your words. The jumpy style and sheer number of symbols kept me from really pulling ...

This poem does a great job of conveying its intended emotion and meaning. It's one of the best I've encountered on this site. I also was confused by the eleventh ...

I really like the meaning behind this poem. The tree is a great symbol for everything that humans frivolously go to war over. Like lilymoore I particularly enjoyed the imagery ...