Nightshade

I almost completely disagree. Sex has been demonized for hundreds (or thousands) of years without good justification. It's sad that people would call it disgusting when in reality it is ...

I liked your metaphor and how you developed it. There were also sections that flowed very nicely and reflected the water itself, as Niki said. However, you broke your rhyme ...

Like seeminglymeaningless, I would definitely suggest breaking this poem down into smaller lines. Also, look through your poem and see how many times you used the word "I". Your sentence ...

I liked the style and imagery you employed in this piece. The idea of a back-alley murderer being a metaphor for a heart-breaking boy is pretty interesting. The first stanza ...

This poem paints a very cool picture. You have a lot of good imagery and unique description packed into a very short poem. The last two lines felt a little ...

My life was over from the beginning But then my eyes saw you (these first two lines are a bit sappy and cliche) That simple and yet mysterious smile I ...

I really liked this. Your imagery and style are very unique and do a great job of capturing and holding interest. The only place I really have any criticism is ...

I like where you're going with this, but it needs some work before it can be a really effective piece. Try sitting down and thinking for a while about exactly ...

This poem didn't really work for me. It seemed to get so lost in its own misery that it forgot to say anything. This section particularly confused me: I'll beg ...

I thought this poem was nice, but not really exceptional. It was well worded and held my interest, but I had seen it all before. I did like the second ...

You had some really cool, unique language in here and I enjoyed reading this poem. The last stanza seemed to break from your style though and didn't have many of ...

I really liked the dark flair that you put on love. There wasn't anything that really drew me in as being exceptionally original or insightful, but I did enjoy the ...

i hear the wind blowing i hear it in the air (it seems odd to hear wind in the air, as wind is air) i don't know what to do ...

Wow. I've seen a lot of great poetry on here, but this is the first time I've actually envied another writer's abilities. Your use of words is incredible and you ...

I really, really enjoyed this. I wouldn't say that it really belongs as poetry though, and I don't think it should be changed to be a poem. With that in ...