Published November 18, 2010
"Just disappear right now and don't come back."
A star fell from my eyes and out of my mouth.
I feel so disgusted.
Disappear.
Be gone forever.
Pretty little liar.
I touch my silken hair,
Feeling the strands.
Boy I'll pull them all out, I tell you!
A wet, white, jelly star on the floor.
Like it was just born.
It came out of my mouth;
How disgusting.
Let your face disappear.
It haunts me so.
I won't beg you.
I'm done with you
Just disappear for our sakes
Now I spilled the star in front of you.
Ugh. Get away from me.
The water splashed on your feet;
Watery vomit.
I'm embarrassed for the final time.
God knows for how long.
I embarrassed myself,
But it's you who embarrassed me.
We are done.
I'm not crying.
I won't do it.
Just disappear!
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I love this *clicks like*
Thank you all for your kind words! I wrote it about that disgusting feeling one gets during/after a breakup. You just feel so disgusted with that person or with yourself and you just feel embarassed.
I love it! But the only thing I can say is that I didn't feel embrassed for you. I suspected that was the idea even before I read the part where it says embarassed, but I didn't feel it. I felt anger more than anything. The anger was great, though, just saying embarassment could have done well there.
I really liked this. Your imagery and style are very unique and do a great job of capturing and holding interest. The only place I really have any criticism is the line:
"The water splashed on your feet;
Watery vomit."
The use of water in two consecutive lines seemed a bit redundant to me.
This is a very interesting poem and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
You freaking inspire me! Your poems all of them are so unique and capture your auidence so well! I'm jealous(:! Your an amazing poet and you really have a good imagination and your poems, well I love reading them. I love the titles too, very rare, I can picture them too. Very good discription. Your poems are just bursting with talent. I love them.
This was very fun to read, but it was also very touching and warm to the heart. I would love to hear this with music! Great work.