Nightmares

Oh dear, I must say I'm a little green atm (in a good way and no not with jealousy) remember to put a rating, please. I was kind of shocked ...

O.O I'm not going to even critique it. I loved it and really hope you do add more to this one. The flow is brilliant and I already love Mimi

Greetings thar, I agree with the previous posted comment that the paragraphs are far too huge. All the description also seemed to get confused as well, make sure you have ...

'Ello 'ello, I do oh so like this piece !!! And I know you said no nitpicks but I just have to comment ! I love your dialogue and writing ...

Hello thar, Just so as you know grammar is not my forte so I wont comment on that, someone else can do it xD. So, there were a few sentences ...

I honestly don't know what it is I like about this. I suppose it must be the phrases and such. My impression of Pippa is conflicted though, at first I ...

Oh dear, there is not a lot to go on at the moment and I must agree it is somewhat cliche but thats not to say it won't become more ...

'Ello, 'ello. Firstly: wow, this is a great improvement on the other version I read. I actually found myself willing the main character to get away and really getting into ...

Oh, its nice to see you took peoples advice and cut out some of the discriptions. I went back and read your previous version and found myself skipping over some ...