NightWriter

Hey 567ajt, I always enjoy reading lyrics simply because they usually have such a lovely flow to them. Your repetition of 'I' in the first stanza is very helpful for ...

Hey there FalseCreed, So first impression was, 'gosh, this is short'. I mean, there's novels, novellas, short-stories, and this. No judgement, just saying. The first two lines - "It's the ...

Hey PenguinAttack, Your poem was honestly the very first piece of work that I have ever seen (judging by the title and description) on YWS that I thought, 'that sounds ...

Hey Mousy, I was interested to read this piece. It seemed from first impression, very unique. From the beginning, I was hooked in. You have a good style. "How in ...

Hey Psudiname, First off, I will say that I have not read your previous 3 chapters yet. If I mention something in the following review that is perhaps correct in ...

I don't understand. Ok, maybe I do, but I read it with a disparaging expression mixed with an undecipherable confusion. I suppose - and this is just a guess - ...

Hey Haven235, First off the block, may I just mention, that you have a lot of writing here. Not that I object - I mean hey, we're all writers and ...

Fantastic. Honestly, that was amazing. The only things I would point out, are in line 10, where I'm fairly sure 'you' is supposed to be 'your', and in line 14, ...

Hey Zephion, This was a touching piece. I sincerely thought it was great the way you captured emotion in such a rough, subtle kind of way. I suppose you could ...

Hey WriteWriter, First off, and I'm just saying here, that 'I Love You' is not original. Yeah, we can think ' mine'll be different ' but in all honesty, you ...

Hey KilljoyRetardedFish, Lets get it going: Firstly, and I quote: "Adrian." His name resounds from my lips. He winced, almost like he wanted to be left alone. resounds is present ...

Hey MasterLHeart, This was a really good, strong written piece. A few mistakes though: Yea h I was your somewhat average teen, but I never had a girlfriend for Christmas ...

Hey MidnightSky, One thing: I was scrawled across the sidewalk in a dark alley behind a bowling lane, in the most peculiar and abnormal position; where I was completely immobile ...

Hey Disenchanted! Okay, lets get into it: I got excited when I read the beginning of this sentence - there is just one thing, though: There was a flash of ...

Hey FrozenHeartFcris, Okay, lets get the constructive criticism over with: One Saturday evening, every single detail of my life change. So, this should either be: On Saturday, every single detail ...