NightOwl

Thanks for catching the typo! I typed this a while ago and didn't even really bother to really look it over carefully again :P Ah, well, lesson learned.

I didn't even notice that I did that until you pointed it out! xD I guess it's just my obsession with birds kicking up again, haha. Thank you! :D

>>For some reason it posted twice, so just look down there v

Sounds intriguing! Some tips/corrections that I found: You were pretty good with your grammar, but I did notice in one sentence, you forgot to capitalize 'Society' in 'Secret Society'. You ...

I think you should. In my opinion, this story has a lot of potential to become even more exciting :)

Thanks! :) I'm really bad with typing xD

Thank you very much! :D

I liked this very much! It rhymes well and it has this very nice beat to it as you read it aloud. It is pretty dark, but I think you ...

Wow, I don't really know what to write... This was amazing. You had excellent wording, and the reader has no problem trying to interpret your feelings. I think the way ...