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This is brilliant - especially for a rough draft! As it's quite a long story I wasn't sure if I should take the time to read and review it or ...

Hey Blankmind, I read this and I really liked it so I thought that I'd take a moment to comment on it. Like shiney1 said, some aspects of it make ...

Hello youngtalentkritz, I think this poem would be a lot better if you seperated it out into stanzas. A good way to see if a poem flows well or not ...

Hey Sparkyrox2, I'm here to help with the grammar and punctuation side of things! Lyricalias has already said a lot of the things I wanted to say. This isn't bad, ...

Hey tanya98, First of all, I want to say that I've read a little of this and I think that you're not a bad storyteller - you seem to have ...

Hey dogs, I really like this! I found that the poem flowed really well when I was reading it and I love the images it brought to mind. Although it ...

Hey TheScratchMan, I love this! I think that the previous reviewers pointed out the only small errors that were there, so I really can't find anything wrong with it at ...

This was absolutely amazing. The writing has real voice and character to it, and the story is heart-breakingly true. This is the kind of short story which really grips the ...

Whoa! I loved the twist there at the end ... it literally made me jump for a moment! The way you wrote it, you'd never have guessed from whose point ...

I think this is really well done. You explored the subject without inserting too many of your own opinions and offending anybody. I love the way that you've told the ...

The last two reviewers have already said a lot of the things I wanted to say, but I still thought I'd review this quickly - because I really liked it. ...

Hey RachaelElg, I read this yesterday, but I didn't have the time to review it. However, ever since I woke up this morning, that line "it is yesterday" has been ...

Hey Toripopppy, First of all, welcome to YWS! You'll find that it's amazing here. Secondly, I loved your story. I love the vivid images your writing creates, and the beauty ...

Hey GawravMehta, I really enjoyed reading this! But before I give a general review, I'll just point out a few minor errors I noticed in this. A teenage girl with ...

This is brilliant! Any limerick beginning with "there was an American dude" is worth reading. I can't see any mistakes/problems with this at all, and it really did make me ...