Nebesah

Hello Hero, They asked him what he'd to say This should be "They asked him what he had to say," or something along those lines. And now I shall share ...

Hiya VioletJune, So I have come to review your piece. I will have to agree with Emorykings and BondGirl007. This was extremely lengthy. I was going to quit at first, ...

So I am here, as promised, to review. i will have to agree with... well I don't remember who said it, but your grammar was so much better in this ...

So Solvalery, I have come to review your piece, as requested. First of all, I would like to say that I liked this way, way, way better than Chp. 2. ...

I liked the beginning ok, but towards the end, it grew boring and your grammar became really, just bad. First he made me trip, at least he's a gentleman and ...

Hello there jasminebells! Now your just like them Your stuck in Hell forever now, your never going to leave. All three of these "your"s should really be "you're" as in ...

Hiya kingolions, So I feel like this whole poem challenged me to find something wrong with it. The whole time you were talking about someone being critical of your writing ...

Alright, so this was nice. It had a lot of emotion built up behind it which made it seem real (good thing), but some of the rhyming seemed forced. (bad ...

So, I was going back looking through all my old reviews, clicking on the links and seeing if the authors had added more. When I saw you wrote more I ...

So, here I am, having waded through your lengthy story. Umm, so I am brutally honest, please do not have your feelings hurt by the torrent of corrections that will ...

So I am back again. I actually did read Chapter Five, but I didn't really have much to say. I like this better than the last chapter. The character is ...

Here I am again. Reading your story and what not... Anyways. I liked this entry too. The only thing I caught was a run-on sentence: The nurses fed us pills ...

It's me again! This is getting to be some sort of routine-y habit-type thing. Ah, well. On to the review and general grammar stuff: I was kind of too busy ...

Hmmm... This is a intriguing plot idea, and you have pretty good grammar (well, you did go a little comma crazy in some parts, but that's no biggie. I do ...

Here I am again, but now reviewing your chapter 2!!! Nothing really worth writing has happened yet. I got a new roommate today, though. Her name is Rebecca and I ...