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For me, right? You posted this for me, right? What a joke. Helpful + emo poetry = disaster. You are incapable of writing it. Enjambment seems to be your friend ...

Dang it. Helpful got there before me. I was just about to point out that 'z' was how it was in England itself before . That said, I, living in ...

Hey Hannah At last, the final part. I am entering this remembering the blackness at the end of part three – if not blackness, then a certain melancholic feel, a ...

Hi BlueAfrica - First comment: I vote for a title change. This piece is exceedingly enchanting and the blatantly obvious title you've got up there does it absolutely no justice ...

Hey Kyllorac – Before I tell you how this poem bored me, I shall enlighten you on how it interested me. King Lear – so many parallels. The Fool says, ...

Hey Hannah – I must say, you timed your breaks rather artfully so that it could have quite easily ended on the second part – and even on this third. ...

Hey antimelrose – Long time, no read. I think you need a less magical avatar, since it is so horribly distracting and beautiful when reading your poetry. Plus, I come ...

Kyllorac - There's a good reason why I haven't reviewed this - you might call it somewhat irrational - but I prefer to review things where I can find at ...

Hey Halycon - You teeter between halfway decent imagery and clichés that will turn away any reader in disgust. Also - your structure is too clean-cut. Each paragraph is an ...

Bonjour encore – I guess the trouble with writing something funny all the way is that you either (a) have to escalate the humour or (b) have little climaxes of ...

HANNAH Long time, no read . I am so glad you posted something. Can’t wait to see more. I will give you an overall impression first, having read both parts ...

Hey sarg - I'm sure I've seen you do this before, no? The tongue-in-cheek strict para-word-counts for the fun of it? Honestly, I don't know how bored you have to ...

blackbird - Ah, see, now this was really something. Forget theme for a moment. You mentioned to me that aesthetics aren't as great here - and I agree entirely. But. ...

Hi Kyladoot - Your aesthetics are working much better than the consistency of your content, so I feel tempted to ignore the content, somewhat. However, poetry isn't built on aesthetics ...

Hi blackbird - Clearly, you have a wide vocabulary. Now, it's just a matter of knowing when showing it off has impact, and when you have more impact in simplicity. ...