Nate

As a Transformers fan-fic of sorts, this was many times better than the Transformers movies. You actually have a story! I found this to be generally well-written. The chapter shows ...

It's an interesting poem, and I like the overall narrative of it. A few things though. First, the poem seems to start off as a letter of sorts to who ...

Good song. A couple of points: I wish I knew what you were doing at this moment Oh, and do you have accidental thoughts of me as well? The "Oh, ...

I liked it. But be careful with the its versus it's! As EliteHusky pointed out, the "It's" in the second line of the third stanza should be "its." It's confusing, ...

From what I can tell, this piece suggests imagery of a ritualistic suicide or human sacrifice. However, a lot of this piece seems like fluff with random words and lines ...

Kyousuke had a very extensive review, so I'll try not to repeat what he said. I think what you have here is a good action sequence. However, I'm not really ...

When writing an acrostic poem, it's good to separate out the words. Here, that would mean placing an extra line in between "Answers are hidden in a web" and "That ...

This probably doesn't belong in General Articles. If you want, I can move it to either Other or General Fiction Short Stories. Just let me know. At any rate, it's ...

The first six lines are great. The imagery and descriptions used work perfectly to convey a scene of a mother suddenly left breathless. However, what I really like about is ...

Good chapter. I especially like how you opened it. Paragraphs like: And it all moved, at a visible speed. Groups of more or less straight, elongated super-clouds, like enormous strands ...

I skipped a couple chapters coming to this one, but this is a very solid chapter. Just a couple notes. First: “That’s close enough,” John says. His hand shakes. Sweat ...

For someone who is supposed to be a semi-Rider, John seems like a wimp. He sleeps after he's had breakfast, worries a lot about dying, and is so scared at ...

As I said in my review of Chapter 6, I like how you use short sentences to convey description. However, what I neglected to say is that a problem does ...

Wow, I've never read a Western before on YWS. It's a shame too because I happen to like Westerns. I have not read the previous chapters, but you have a ...

Just a couple nit-picky things to address. “Sorry,” Josh said again , this time apologising for apologising . You don't need the part I crossed out as it's already implied ...