NaRachel

Wow, this is great!!! :) The opening line is brilliant and really gets the reader excited for the rest of the poem. I love this part I woke this morning ...

Wow. This is pretty different, in terms of format it doesn't follow the usual songwriting "rules", however unconventionality isn't a sin but a blessing when it works and I think ...

Hey :) I just wrote a very large reply to this piece and it didn't send properly and therefore was deleted :( Soooo, I'm going to summarise. Basically what I ...

OKAY :) So your only 14, its clear your just a beginner but thats okay it means you have things to work on :) First of all, the good bits, ...

Aw :( Wow every time you said something like "I can't stand you anymore" or used the f word or "go to hell". I felt like it was actually stabbing ...

Would it kill you to write something normal that i can actually relate to and that doesn't need an 18 plus warning on it?... Lol.. Nah i appreciate that your ...

Wow this is simply beautiful (note the pun)... if this is a real girl I say give her this poem and go for it haha. Nah I was really brought ...

I love the "meh... I felt poetic" that is something I would say. I'm not a regular poet either but I thought it was good! I'm going to take it ...

Yay :) You wrote about something real this time :) It really shows, this song is complex and conflicted - like a real person. ( I'm not saying I don't ...

Hey :) I really, really like this, it was great- well done!!! :) The whole thing flowed really nicely and kept me interested until the very end, you kept it ...

Hi there :) First of all, good job! There were some really good images in here. There was a certain fragmented feel to this poem which I liked. I think ...

Hi :) Can I just say I know exactly how you feel reading back on old lyrics... haha sometimes I cringe at my own. But I think this is really ...

There were parts of this song that made me gasp with amazement because they were that good :) I think in songwriting it's okay to use cliches such as a ...

Hi :) this was good! First of all you've mispelled foolishness. I like the fact that you have to concentrate to get the meaning- you have a great way of ...

I thought I'd be a rebel and ignore the "18 plus" warning. This is really powerful and intense, well done... I mean it seriously, like it dirupted my breathing pattern ...