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Re: Fighting For Love (probably will change title) Ch. 1: Adam
Hello! I loved your title so I just had to come see what it was all about. Things You could Improve On: --Your first sentence doesn't really draw the writer ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Deleted
Hello! My name's Christina and I'll be reviewing your story this fine Saturday. Things to Improve Upon: -In the second letter that she starts writing to her mom, the longer ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Blood in the Sunrise-Part I
Hello there! Here I am, to review as requested. :D I don't mind that it's long, but I suppose in the future you should break something like this down into ...
Aug 18, 2010 -
Re: Leave Out All The Rest *contest entry*
Hello there! I'll be reviewing your work this fine Wednesday. :) I'm so sorry it took so long to answer your request on my review forum; my E-mail didn't send ...
Aug 18, 2010 -
Re: Running for you
Hello there! I'm Christina and I'll be reviewing your work this fine Monday. :D Good Things: First off, I really like your title. It creates questions and interest, and it ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: BLAKE
Hello there! I'll be reviewing your work this fine Friday. :D I also ask you to not take these things personally. I just want to help. :D First off, I ...
Aug 13, 2010 -
Re: Chilly Farm~A Short Story
Hello there! Sorry this is so late, but here I am, to review as requested. Wow this piece is real popular. 5 likes; good job. :D Nit picks: - I've ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Planes
Hey there, Lilicia! This story, while very short, caught and held my attention really well. So good job on that. :D I also enjoyed how you fooled your audience in ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Sickroom #2
Hello again! Yes, this still interests me, but the age thing is starting to get a bit creepy. I agree with LittlePetRock, he is a bit too nice. Maybe I'm ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Sickroom
Hey there! First off, I really liked this. It caught my attention well, and the subject was very unique and cool. Though I do have a few things maybe you ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Life
Hey there! First of all, even though this topic can be cliche, I think you wrote it in a way that made it very original. I like the words you ...
May 7, 2010 -
Re: I
Hey there! I really liked this. I usually don't review poetry, but I liked this. It has a certain flow to it, making it kind to the eyes. It's also ...
Apr 16, 2010 -
Re: deleted
Hey there. First off, I must say that I really liked this. I couldn't stop reading. Your writing has a really good flow to it and it's easy to read. ...
Mar 25, 2010 -
Re: untitled chapter 1
Hey! I have a couple things I had a problem with in this story: Leaving behind everything I knew, everything that was familiar and safe to me, I did not ...
Mar 24, 2010 -
Re: Butterfly, fly away
I totally know how you feel when posting a story for the first time. I know my writings often do feel like my children. But if I were you, I ...
Feb 23, 2010
