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Re: School of Hell, Chased
Hey Lee, Cool story. I'm automatically hooked and look forward to reading more. While reading your work I didn't come across any problems that just jumped out at me. The ...
Feb 27, 2013 -
Re: Voices: Chapter One: Dreams of Freedom, Part One
Hey BookLover33, I enjoyed your story, but there were a few things that could use a little work. First off I don't think you had to add "would you like ...
Feb 27, 2013 -
Re: FREAK - Chapter 4
I loved this chapter! I knew that Sara wasn't going to kill the freak! I read the second and third chapter but figured I'd just review all of them when ...
Feb 26, 2013 -
Re: FREAK - Chapter 1
Hey Snoink, This is an interesting and somewhat odd piece. But I don't mean that as an insult, I like interesting and odd. I'll definitely read more. While reading your ...
Feb 25, 2013 -
Re: Do You Believe In Whales? - Chapter Three
Hey AwesomeSauce, This piece isn't as good as the others but it isn't bad, it just needs a little work. You need more details. As far as I can see ...
Feb 25, 2013 -
Re: Without Destiny: Prologue
Well I'm having trouble forming an opinion about this work. At first it was a little . . . weird and confusing but then it became really interesting. What really ...
Feb 25, 2013 -
Re: The Winter Prince part 2
Hey Mochi, I love this Herja chick, so cool. This chapter isn't muck different than the other one when it comes to quality. It doesn't feel rushed and remains interesting ...
Feb 25, 2013 -
Re: The Winter Prince part 1
Hey Mochi, Cool name by the way. I liked your story. It was interesting and kept a consistent pace, I didn't feel as if you were rushing through any of ...
Feb 25, 2013 -
Re: Pride: Origin
Hey there, so I only got to read the first chapter of this because I wanted to get in a few more reviews. But I have to say that this ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
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Hey Peregrine, First off, great work. This piece was interesting and fast paced so I didn't get bored at all. I like Katherine's character a lot. Although I am wondering ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: The Survivors- Chapter 1
Hey ScribbleBug, I like this piece, it was interesting and a great attention grabber. I like Evelyns character, despite her being a little rough around the edges. But sadly, I ...
Feb 22, 2013 -
Re: SIMON & FAITH - Chapter One
Okay so I'm hooked. I want to read more. But that doesn't mean this piece is perfect. I think the main problem that I encountered was that there weren't enough ...
Feb 15, 2013 -
Re: Do You Believe In Whales? - Chapter Two
Okay so I am starting to see where your piece needs work. Some of your descriptions and the things that your characters sat are a little stiff or not descriptive ...
Feb 15, 2013 -
Re: Do You Believe In Whales? - Chapter One
Okay so I liked this work, it was interesting and I like the youthful personality of your character. I mean it's fiction! It's okay for the characters to be a ...
Feb 15, 2013 -
Re: No
I liked this story. I'm generally not a big fan of fan-fiction but this wasn't so bad. I liked how it's written in the viewpoint of Seth (he was one ...
Feb 13, 2013
