Myth

Its an interesting beginning and if you did add a little description it wouldn't be too bad - they create images to make stories clearer.

For some weird reason I got it today! Now that mystery of the name will be solved soon! I'm about half-way through the critique of BFG. * Green = Comment/Correction ...

I didn't read your post properly Dreamy, so I didn't know what you pointed out. :D

This essay really got me thinking and kept me reading until the end. There is nothing I would want to change as it is personal to you (am I right?) ...

You have a few typos/spelling mistakes in there that can be found easily. What you have to change, when editing, is to keep your writing in the past tense. There ...

Among the rats and the sickness, there was never a point in the exploit on that Coffin Ship when we stopped our lonley cries for home, and our wretches from ...

I know you said you didn

Thanks for reading, Sureal and your input on the gender. I've changed that sentence, I don't know why I wrote it. I must have been half asleep when it was ...

The seeming non-existance of two of the Strazhas did occur to me writing this, but for some reason I was so convinced that the reader would forget that in the ...

Looking at it closer, since I couldn't help but stare at it, I noticed that it wasn't truly black. It was more of a dark grey. That was so much ...

Soldier: We’ll have the medals sent along after you, they need to be redocumented first so they can write you up temporary papers. I’m debating whether ‘redocumented’ is a word ...

Livny seems to be making a sincere effort to make the ritual waste of cigarettes a national event, because he reached up to the kid for another one and smiled ...

Needless to say, after much practice, I became skilled enough to reload in thirty seconds. Now I don't know much about guns but is this the type where you get ...

Aw the poor fox was caught. I'm wondering if foxes eat bacon. I liked the last thing the fox said before he was caught.

Ah, after re-reading I see your point. Well.. the suggestions there if you decide to change things around at a later stage. =)