The Eclectic

by Myth

Published September 12, 2006

Gone.

*Locked*

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Dream Deep
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Dream Deep wrote a review Review · Sep 15, 2006

I printed it out, Myth, so I'll get you a crit written up over the weekend! ^_^ I figure you deserve a nice hefty one, in return for the fine job you did with the Chair. :wink:

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Myth
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Myth commented Comment · Sep 14, 2006

Thanks for reading, Sureal and your input on the gender.

I've changed that sentence, I don't know why I wrote it. I must have been half asleep when it was typed.

I edited it so that the Eclectic is female.

Any other comments are welcome.

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Sureal wrote a review Review · Sep 13, 2006

Nice read :).

There's one bit that confuses me slightly:

If I had put it in other words it would have been quite difficult not to sound dull, for I am not in the least bit boring.

That doesn't sound right. If the character had put it in other words, it would have sounded boring because the narrator isn't boring?


But this was well writen and flowed nicely. On the gender of the Eclectic, I don't know. For the most part, I imagined s/he as a male, although this may be because I am, myself, male.

I'm intrigued on where this is going. I'll be sure to read up on any later instalments :).



You'd better wise up, Pony... you get tough like me and you don't get hurt. You look out for yourself and nothing can touch you, man.
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