Myth

Is there more to come? I would love to read further especially since Lyle doesn't like humans but we don't know why becuse you plungd the reader into a scene ...

Green = Comment Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * It was as pale as the moon that shown in the window. Was the ‘shown’ supposed to be ‘ shone ...

Green = Comment Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * It all seemed [s]so incredibly[/s] the same. The parts cut out didn’t do the sentence any good. All the fueling ...

I notice you like to make the ending line in your poems bold. is there a reason for that? To me it seems the last line really tells the story: ...

I liked the idea of having two speakers in the poem and the italics actually helped to separate the grandchild and grandfather. But you didn't really put anything in to ...

Green = Comment Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The moon glowed crimson in the ominous sky. Sorry to say this but that isn’t the best way to start: ...

This sounds like something that would turn out to be a brilliant novel. Each stanza has its own meaning, putting them together creats the story. I especially loved: —and I ...

I fear it'll burst from my chest I don't know what it is about this part. It seems out of place from the rest of the stanza that goes 6-6-6-8. ...

Can grab you while you’re in your bed Perhaps: Can grab you while you're in bed Of the eight tiny spiders you swallow in your Lifetime One of the reasons ...

Poem don't have to rhyme. I poured my heart out, To you. This has been done so often it means nothing to me. Try putting it differently, what have you ...

Green = Comment Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * “Sorry, my parents are, um, going out tonight, and I can’t.” Even to Evan’s own ears the excuse sounded lame. ...

You might want to check over for typos: 'to' instead of 'too'. I agree with Lizzy, go for something original, make the monster[s] sound scary. I'm old and still afraid ...

Beautifully written and the only thing that sticks out is: Behind her, a branch snapped, the sound of wood breaking. Isn't the sound of wood breaking just the same as ...

And this old lady of a house is split into two apartments. I liked how you compare the house being like an old lady. Your apartment seems to look exactly ...

Green = Comment Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Just thinking about it was making her brain spin. ‘ head ’ rather than ‘brain’? Who was this Cymbeline and ...