MysticalBlood

Thanks, i know there are some things that sound misplaced and odd, but i'm glad you like the second version. :)

Yup. Thanks. :) Is this by any chance better? Try being me, Waking up every morning, Holding your breath, Silently worrying… Arriving home from school, Holding your breath, Silently worrying, ...

Ha ha thanks. This only part of chapter one, everything is explained later on, and with me, it's either too long or too rushed. It's so frustrating. I haven't finished ...

awe thanks guys! I completely forgot about this! :D i don't know if i'll write anymore, but i might do. :p

yep, that's what gave me the idea, and oh well... um i haven't written any more because i've been so busy with other stuff! argh... and yeah, but he did ...

okie doke, your review is helpful. ;) i'm trying to brush up on things, and i'm refreshing my memory by watching the first ep of second series. ;)

oh yeah damn, forgot about that. :P

ha ha yeah i know it wasn't perfect, i was writing it on here because i couldn't really be bothered to open up miscrosoft word. :P and plus i had ...

ok, i never normally drag things out, it's just when i don't it seems too rushed. i guess i can't do either. thanks anyway. :)

that's only a bit of it, i'm going to write more but i just wanted to see what people thought of this bit. :P

thanks! I haven't started part two because I'm quite busy, but I'll post it here when i can. :P :elephant:

Did it rhyme? I didnt notice! Thanks anyway!

good... i think we shouldn't have a discussion on here... should leave it open for reviewers aye? x :elephant: (it's kind of annoying me now the pink elephant) :twisted: but ...

lol. when you're done bring it to school. :P or give me a signed copy if you get it published. i'll do the same lol. :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: can't ...

yeah i know.. i'll toughen charlie up. that's something i need to change lol.