MyDaddyIsSuperman

Okay, first of all. I'm already singing this. It's very haunting for me, it feels as though a group of men are marching towards their death, all singing this haunting ...

If I had enough skin, I would tattoo this to myself. Instead, I will settle for imprinting this into my mind. This piece has a very haunting feel to me. ...

This is very interesting and brilliantly written. I loved your word choice, especially when describing the surroundings, it immediately brings images to the mind, rather than making the reader think ...

This is a very interesting start. I was very interested in the story and where it was headed next. The only advice/suggestion I can give you is to back through ...