Amazing!I think it's perfect.Keep up the good work, I mean it!
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Okay, first of all. I'm already singing this. It's very haunting for me, it feels as though a group of men are marching towards their death, all singing this haunting melody. Now, I will describe the image that comes to me when I sing (*cough*) I mean, read this piece.
Dawning light, setting sun-
Saints and warriors, one by one
Fade into the past
Leaving shadows cold as stone.
We are only two-
Working miracles, me and you.
Soldiers of the truth
In this life we’re never alone
Step into today,
All impurities burn away.
This was very good! I enjoyed reading it. It flowed nicely and your rhythm was wonderful!
Keep up the good work and keep writing! You are are very good!
Dawning light, setting sun-
Saints and warriors, one by one
Fade into the past
Leaving shadows cold as stone.
We are only two-
Working miracles, me and you.
Soldiers of the truth
In this life we%u2019re never alone #0000BF ">Loved this stanza
Step into today,
All impurities burn away.
#FF0000 ">This one was my favorite but...the other ones have four maybe this one should too? Its up to you just thought it might look better
~KJR~
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