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Hi Kat! Music, here as requested! So sorry it took me this long, darling! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Calming thoughts flew into her mind. She closed her eyes. Who could ...

Hello, Afeefah! Music- here as requested. Sorry I'm a bit late on this, as I was out of town. :oops: On to the review! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I wake ...

Hi KJ! I'm Music, and I'll be critiquing your work today. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: The bridge [Why don't you give a tiny description to the bridge's physical characteristics ...

Lin! *tackles* Music here, as... commanded? :D Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I looked up curiously at the huge old building, intimidated by [s]it’s[/s] its enormous size. “Of course it is!” ...

Hello! Music, here as requested! :D Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I turn around, snarling, but [s]realising[/s] realize there’s no way I can take them all on at once with just ...

Hiya Megan! Sorry I'm a bit late- I've been very busy. :oops: Anyway, on with the review! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: My dad was coming to pick up Will and ...

Hello dear! Music here, as requested! Great job on the piece, by the way! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: My hand lay, listless and ignored , in his.

Hello darling! Music, here as requested! Let's see what I can do! *laughs maniacally and proceeds* Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I came back, in the next day’s morning.

Hi dear! Music, here as requested! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I whimper softly in my bed, my entire body shaking[s],[/s] ; a cold sweat settled [settles?] over my skin. Hearing ...

Hey, Ashley! I'm Music, and I'll be critiquing your work today. Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: The man just shook his head and , still ducking, headed for the safety of ...

Hello darling! I believe I've reviewed you before! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Her mother decided she needed to be more involved in her school, so her e she was, kneeling ...

Hello, darling! About time you posted more! :D Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Jack.

Hi Conrad! Music here to critique for you today. Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Muryk stroked Elenna’s cheek with one hand, and held her black umbrella over her head with the ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music- here to critique for you today. Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: "What grace in her voice!", The comma isn't needed here. he thought to himself. I must ...

Cat! Whee! Music here. xD Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I opened my eyes to look at Mommy staring at me, crying. “We are going to get you to a hospital ...