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Re: Untitled
I didn't find the topic to be so cliche. Actually I quite enjoyed this. It seemed to realate to anyone and everyone out there. I would have made the point ...
Jan 16, 2009 -
Re: From Dusk to Dawn
I didn't quite understand what the setting for this was. I understood some sort of war but in what time? was it in modern day or mideival time? In set ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: Wait...
wow that was impressive I can't even really find anything to pick on you about. I could ask what exactly you're wondering about in the poem?? line 3 needed a ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: Pendrop Feather (prolouge)
I liked this actually. It seemed different from the usual. It seems to need a bit more of a point to it though. Explain why theyre on the ship, where ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: Twilight
it could have been thought out better. I agree with DeeDee that this had almost nothing to do with twilight but whatever. in set 3 lines 3 and 4 dont ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: The Other Side
Wow impressive there were a few minor mistaes nothing major I couldnt make out the visualization. I understood everything but had to sort of create the caracters myself. Try adding ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: Demons
It seemed to be missing emotion. All of it seemed for like fact fact fact instead of opinion included. Try to add a little more feeling into it. The poem ...
Jan 14, 2009
