Published January 14, 2009
Secrets have been passed
Will I come out last?
Or will I be the reigning champ
So now I sit here and wait
For what lies in my Fate
Now I wonder
Was it too soon?
Was it too late?
Or was it just right?
Only time will tell
But now I must say for adieu,
And once again say Goodnight
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Okay, umm....i really did not understand this poem very much at all. I didn't really like it either. That doesn't mean that it's worthless, I just didn't get anything out of it personally.
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But I do think that you need to put some more periods and a question mark or 2 where they belong.
Secrets have been passed (PERIOD)
Will I come out last?
Or will I be the reigning champ (QUESTION MARK)
So now I sit here and wait (COMA)
For what lies in my Fate (PERIOD)
Now I wonder (COMA)
Was it too soon?
Was it too late?
Or was it just right? (these "was it" 's are becoming a little trite. Try wording it differently with a little creativity.
Only time will tell (PERIOD)
But now I must say for adieu,
And once again say Goodnight (PERIOD)
well writtten, it was short and sweet. concise and to the piont.
well done
Later
Ok this is interesting...I don't know what it is about but its interesting.
Ok, first of all from reading this, I thought the poem was somewhat about a person having a secret and there's rumors going around about it...Though the next line seems out of place. Reigning champ at what??
Your rhyming scheme is off too.
Sorry, this isn't a very good review but I couldn't get anything out of it.
- JC
wow that was impressive
I can't even really find anything to pick on you about.
I could ask what exactly you're wondering about in the poem??
line 3 needed a question mark on it... uuummmm
XD that's all i could say not much to it
the poem was pretty simple. pretty easy to read.
You better get ready for all of the comments you're going to get
good job!! loves ya Curly