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Re: Morning
Thank you for the review! I used the ocean waves because I always think of the steady rhythm of the ocean waves crashing on the shore. Thank you for highlighting ...
May 2, 2014 -
Re: Fill Me In
Oh my gosh, thanks for pointing out that typo!
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: A Letter To My Mother About My Virginity
Thanks! I took some of your revisions into account. I wrote this in the present tense, taking into account that some things happened previously, so some of the tenses will ...
Apr 22, 2014 -
Re: Scars
Lumi was not rude in the least. Lumi, I think you did a wonderful job of staying objective in your review. I agree with it wholeheartedly. Also, IAlreadyDied, Lumi was ...
Apr 11, 2014 -
Re: This is not a poem.
A screwdriver is an alcoholic drink made of orange juice and vodka.
Apr 11, 2014 -
Re: 99 Miles to Council Bluffs, or Infinity
Hi, Audy! The poem is titled about a specific place more than a characteristic of a town. It is the place on the road that has a sign that says ...
Feb 21, 2014 -
Re: How long has this been sitting here?
Thanks for the review! I know some of the lines sound awkward, but they sound that way because I purposely wrote this in iambic pentameter. "Into the murky depths my ...
Feb 18, 2014 -
Re: Dynamic
Hi, thanks for the review! I don't know which parenthesis you're speaking of, since there aren't any in the poem. Also, "chaser" is a soda you use to wash down ...
Feb 13, 2014 -
Re: Coal Wrapped Dream
Whoa, bro. A+.
Feb 10, 2014 -
Re: Nobody Sees
My dear, sweet GreenTulip, YWS is a place to get constructive criticism. If you don't want any, don't put it here. Cheers, Magpie
Feb 6, 2014 -
Re: The Most Exciting-Terrifying-Super-Exstatic-Fun-arific-Ultra-Scary-Adventure
I was not harsh. Overall, you have some ideas, but this piece needs a lot of editing before it's ready to be shown to the public. That's okay, though. All ...
Jan 30, 2014 -
Re: The Most Exciting-Terrifying-Super-Exstatic-Fun-arific-Ultra-Scary-Adventure
1) I'm telling her what I think. This is a review. Criticism is implied. 2) You should let her speak for herself if she wishes. She hasn't said anything yet. ...
Jan 30, 2014 -
Re: What is Attractive?
This is a comment rather than a review, since I see you have an ample amount already. Not by laws or people with biased ideas, Women are still struggling to ...
Jan 30, 2014 -
Re: The worst time to encounter an earthquake is when you are riding a bike.
I am also a feminist. Is there something I'm not seeing that's wrong with the last line? I hope I didn't do anything iffy lol please explain?
Jan 30, 2014 -
Re: Chasing Liberty - Part 1
So, uh, no offense Wrisky, but what was the point of this? This isn't even a comment on the work, but a comment on morals. You find this work offensive? ...
Jan 29, 2014