Monki

Thanks everyone. I decided to re-try. This is not going to be my novel. I'm in the romance mood, so let's see where this goes. I'm about to post the ...

4uiwouldie > I'm sorry, but a critique is going to contain mostly negative aspects on your writing most of the time. If you don't like it, I don't think this ...

Thanks people! I totally agree. I just thought about that as I was posting it. :oops: Whoops! I'm going to fix it and put the edited version up tomorrow (most ...

Thanks Gladius, Billy, and Sleeping Valor! I will work on it. ;) I noticed that I seem to switch tenses a lot, too. But, I just left it as-is and ...

Thank you all! I've decided that I'll try reading it again. I gave up for a few weeks, but since you guys have tempted me with all good things about ...

Another one of your ramblings which I wish to plaster somewhere in my writing room and on one of my school binders! Please tell me I have permission to do ...

Eep. I suppose I didn't clarify enough that the little dude popped up on the computer screen (not behind her). Ha ha. Simple mistake. And about the details as you ...

Cool! Canada! *ish uncoordinated too* Well, I must go. (Grrr... bed time for me. I'm really tired! I would stay up later and drink coffee, but I need sleep to ...

Ha ha! No, seriously though. Pursue your dream. I think you're meant to use the pen as your weapon-definitely not a sword though, because I don't think you+a sword would ...

P. > Yay! Monki gets :smt054 back! (P.S. You can't truthfully tell me that you like my work. It sucks right now. I think it's just because I am just ...

P. > Thanks for the tip. *Writes down on notepad full of tips given by peeps of YWS (really, I did write it down-just 'cause it sounds cool and professional)* ...

Hey, thanks again P.! Monki has lots of

No, that's exactly what I need! It's not harsh! It's constructive ! Keep it up! People think it hurts, but if they know how to use it, it helps. :) ...

Good suggestions. In fact, I was thinking of starting sort of over and making the beginning where she is fighting and arguing her point with the conclave, but the reason ...

Thank you both for your critiques. Kylan > Good thing I take 'constructive' criticism well. That's a good thing though. I need people to be a bit tough on me ...