Misty

thank you. I'll add "on a pedastal" just for you!

just a side note: I wasn't drunk when I was dancing with him, it was just meant to say his presence was intoxicating. if you know what I mean. Just ...

yeah. I plugged a lot of people. I was really desperate for crit on this one cuz I want to make it good so it'll really mean something. :D thank ...

It's really good, the story line and general plot drew me in right away, but it needs more description, and less chatting. That's all I caught!

i agree. it starts to get stronger as you keep reading. thats what I wanted it to do. :D

thanks everyone! Your crit helped a lot. :D I appreciate it. :D

I thought this was really profound, it's a good poem. I haven't got any crit left in me today, thogh

thanks for the description, the first part makes total sense but I still wouldn't put a cliche in something otherwise so perfect and...I dunno, I just think it would be ...

Okay, thanks. I understand. But I will be one of those people, just wait...

she has a point. i'm over your disgusting avatar, brad. And...oddly enough, the second and third time through I really like this. Considering that I vaguely know the story behind ...

It's short, but sweet. I really think you should enlongate it though to convey your purpose better/

Finishing it. “Now, Cecilia, it is important to pray at least twice a day,” what does praying have to do with anything? I cautioned, “you wouldn’t want the gods to ...

????? I spent twenty minutes commenting on this and it didn't show up? No way am I doing it again. it was good, that was the overall message of my ...

I liked it, but also...the rhyming seemed sort of forced. And also it seems like you maybe could have conveyed your message to a deeper sense. But it was cool.

thanks for sharing that...