Misty

Jesus. This may be the best semi-rhyming poe,m I've ever read. The last two lines were moving...the length was perfect. The slight repitition suited this perfectly and I'm glad you ...

hey ari I thought this was excellent, you're a great writer. The last line was great, but the whole scene was great, and I liked the whole "military efficency" bit. ...

“Click” the lock sounds, and I breathe a sigh of relief. What if he’s serious? What if he’s not lying? “Stop it Nicky, he was just messing with you,” admonishing ...

ho hum. I tried to do an actual crit and I just got, well, you know "nice, great, cool," and so on so forget that. There were a couple of ...

lol sam you know I love this. It sounds vaguely familiar, gee I wonder why....:D It's really well written I especially like that bit at the end w. the gingham ...

Poor Imp got the errors. The concept for the story was good, if you could go on with this it'd be nice but you need to work on your grammar ...

It seems too unreal to believe...I don't want to believe it. I keep pushing it towards the back of my mind, hoping it will all go away. It keeps surfacing ...

hey---I love Relienk K too, been a fan since I was eleven. Saw them in concert last summer, in fact... Anyway---This is NOT bad, but the spelling is AWFUL, so ...

:P I don't think it was meant to be critiqued. He just wanted to share. I thought it was CERAYZEE funny lol. :P

I liked this a lot. I don't know...maybe it was just the feel of it. How you were always slashing and reprising and flxing it, making it change constantly. I ...

hehe. yeah...I did. I enjoy super-analyzing things. You know what's scary...no, really, scary-is that this story is coming back to haunt me in the weirdest ways. Like, this morning (literally, ...

I liked this. :P it was so true, but you stated it plainly. Just like, "this is how it is..." it's a good poem, I enjoyed it. I don't really ...

funny, i thought i had commented on this. hmmm...anyway i liked it, i was pretty much awesome. nah it didn't scare me, but it made it a little bit more ...

hmm. I liked this all right. The beginning had all the action, after that it was just explaining the action which I didn't like as much but it was still ...

wooooooooowwww...that kid's lost it huh? hmm...I don't know ill have to crit it later because I need more time to think about it. but make fucking fucking, not fecking. :P ...