MissLyricz

Hey, tigeraye! I have returned for yet another review! :P Well, more introductions to more interesting characters! The supposed coincidences of Toby meeting people he had known before attending Heartb

Hey there, tigeraye! MissLyricz is here for yet another review! ;) Although the length of this chapter was shorter than your previous ones, it still delivered an interesting plot and ...

Wow, what an interesting day of introduction to people on his first day at Heartbeat Academy! I'm almost feeling sorry for Toby- not sure how he's going to get used ...

Well, I was not expecting such a reaction from Bailey when they stood outside Heartbear Academy. It only begs the question: did something happen that has affected her emotionally? I ...

Once again, you've written a great chapter, my friend- wonderful job! :D This chapter, although it was very well-written and interesting, it felt a bit different. It was almost like ...

Well, nit-picking and negatives are not going to encourage you one bit! So, I'm just gonna stick to the positives because that's what you deserve and besides pointing out spelling ...

Hey there, tigeraye! :D Well, this chapter was almost a relief when you consider the events of the previous ones. In this one, Toby met a dear old friend and ...

Very intense and well-written chapter, you certainly have a clear view of where the story is headed and this shows through your confidence in your writing, my friend. :D I ...

Well, I've read Chapter 3 and 4 and I must say the light-hearted nature to your writing is very effective. I rather enjoyed the last few chapters, they were a ...

Very well-written chapter, my friend. :D The description of Vincent's appearance is interesting, though I'll definitely have to go and watch the music video to discover how you picture him! ...

Wow, just wow. What got my attention was the title. It drove me nuts, but I had a feeling it was supposed to be typed like that. I thought that: ...

Hey there, Amindor! :D Well, it was a good introduction. It was almost an unexpected scenario, but that's always good, keeps the readers entertained and interested! The dialogue between the ...

Well, I must say this is a great beginning to your story, MicoSoul. :) You didn't give too much information away, but just enough to keep the readers interested and ...

Wow. Looking back on these old stories helps you to appreciate how far you've come as a writer, OnlyWaffle! I admit it, they were not very good, but some of ...

Very dark, mystifying and almost intense! Very well-written, Lightsong! Wonderful job! I rather liked the way you described the person's sadness and sorrow because of betrayal, it was very emotional. ...