MissGangamash

I didn't realise if you unpublish and republish that the reviews would stay XD Anyway, I've already posted on your wall. But thanks again for reading and writing such a ...

I typed all this out and it disappeared so if it comes up twice, sorry. Basically what I see as a reoccurring problem with these stories is that they're too ...

I have added a few more lines between the transition to make it a little smoother, you're not the only one to point out the suddenness of the change. I ...

Wallace is definitely a case 'not realising what you've got til it's gone' but what I think makes it more sad is that actually what he had was barely the ...

I like the analysis of Cedric and Wallace! I can totally see that. Cedric used Wallace as a pawn to get Mirabelle, just how Oldin used Cedric to get more ...

I really didn't enjoy killing off Mirabelle but I'm glad you understand the importance of it. Her death was hinted at throughout the story and it really was the pillar ...

There is an acceptance within Wallace now, I completely agree. From him having to leave Kalmador he's not really allowed himself to think, but with the little respite in the ...

I love the comparisons you've made the the Greysmarsh scene and the wedding portrait - I completely agree! And I'm glad you can feel the acceptance along with the sadness ...

The change in pace for the end of chapter 16 was to show Wallace's deterioration. He has completely lost hope and is simply waiting to die at that point. Sorry ...

Seeing you review the next chapter made me realise I hadn't replied to this one! Sorry! It's because you're still a few chapters behind so I forget to look back. ...

I do like to write very raw things for my characters to go through, I will admit that. I like delving into the human pysche and really drawing on emotions. ...

Ahh thank you so much! I really wanted to get this chapter right and really get across the despair and emptiness within Wallace at this point. The destruction of Greysmarsh ...

The death of Mirabelle sits very heavily on Wallace's shoulders but just because he is not outwardly talking about his pain doesn't mean he's not feeling it. He's compartmentalising again. ...

I think I see it as you should have never loved me because you then disrupted my fantasy of you. If it had all stayed a fantasy and it was ...

I'm sorry! D: It was foreshadowed a lot throughout the story that this was going to happen! I did want it to come across that Wallace is just emotionally exhausted ...