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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Dancing Stars

    Yeah, punctuation is an issue but people have already covered that. I liked this, it conjured up some great story lines and imagery, but I think you could have one; ...

    Mar 4, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Literature Train

    Hm, I really like the rhythm in this, it worked well but I think that some of the lines could be changed so that it just helps the flow along; ...

    Dec 12, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Secret Life

    Hm, the rhythm was actually quite strange in this, but I absolutely love the idea; it's pretty original I must say and I just stumbled upon it while searching through ...

    Dec 11, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My Darling

    Mm, this was very nice Mr. Gadi. I think the idea choice, first of all, is one of best I've read on here so far. Your imagery and the emotion ...

    Dec 6, 2007
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: When We Walked

    I liked the imagery in this; you did a real good job. The rhythm worked with the flow so that the whole thing worked together; I like how it was ...

    Dec 6, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: squeak. . . . squeak

    Hm, I don't understand this at all. Your structure is not the best, your gramatical spelling is terrible and the structure of your sentences could be cleaned up. I second ...

    Dec 5, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Purple Memories

    Mhm, this is good, I agree with the others. I think you really have a talent for setting the scene and for creating some good imagery that makes the reader ...

    Dec 5, 2007
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Something Out There

    Hm, this feels good to read. I liked how you structured it and you put a lot of thought into how you could improve it; that's real good! I kinda ...

    Dec 5, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I write haikus?

    Uhm, are these all separate poems? I love Haiku poems because in their small few words, they're so beautiful and if they're done well, then they can really inspire someone ...

    Dec 5, 2007


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