MilesGrayson

I've noticed that everyone is very fond of Colonel Grey's story, and not very fond of Serenity. My hope was to bring them together soon and continue on from there, ...

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I've never really understood poetry, but this seems pretty good. But as always poetry has left me confused.

Why is it, when I look at the story here it seems like there are spaces missing, but when I go to edit it, its perfectly fine?

Thanks for your advice, this was my first time writing anything and I'll try and work on the things you pointed out. I'll ditch Serinity's nickname or even rename her, ...

This was awesome! I loved at the end that you said, "Her tunic was ripped in places that would've made any young man look". It made me chuckle after all ...