MiddleEarthGal

Very nice! I really like the suspense. Here's my few critiques: 1-"On the age of thirteen, Hannah started to have strange dreams" - Shouldn't that be, *At the age of ...

Ok... I liked it, and how the dialouge is, but maybe to double the length you could add more details. Like where you put "They walked side by side through ...

Very nice! Way to leave me hanging! The only things I noticed were: It was rather long, but it kept me interested through the whole thing. :-) Where you put ...

Very good poem, with a very good message! It was a bit short, but hey, you were ten! That's better than I can do now! (I'm not any good at ...

Wow, this is a really good piece of work! The only critique I have to offer is where you put, " took a long weighted drag.". I don't know anything ...

I LOVED this!! I was laughing so hard!! Way to describe all the flavors...Now I'm craving ice cream... Keep up the good work! Like I said, I was nearly dying ...

Wow, that was so sad, yet so good! I liked how the patient was so calm, even at death's door. I still felt sorry for the poor guy, though, and ...

Oooh! Way to leave me hanging!! I only noticed a few errors. "What if they get back soon, but?" - I think maybe you mean 'But what if they get ...

Once again, very well done! There weren't any spelling mistakes, but, the part where he walks into the stable, and you wrote, "He was greeted by a gentle whicker and ...

Wow! That's really good! I loved the descriptive words, it all painted a very clear picture in my mind. The only thing I noticed was: “take that hangdog look off ...

It was really good. I agree with the above writer, except, maybe instead of taking out the sentence just take out 'pub'. There was only one spelling mistake that I ...

Nice! The room mate reminds me of me in the morning. LOL I only noticed a few little things, but, for the most part, it was hilairious! I am thinking, ...

Wow! That's so good, girlio! I really did enjoy reading it, considering I don't read that much poetry. (Insert an ashamed face.) And, I might as well confess, I also ...

Once again, good chapter! There were only a few little mistakes that I noticed.(The knife flew into her chest, and *kept* going!) And I figure, if you're like me, what ...