MichaelaBobbin

Dear Miss Potential. I enjoyed this very much, I was a bit confused at the start with who was who and what was regarding them that I had to go ...

At first I thought this was about Mona Lisa, especially with the painting at the start; took me a while to catch up with the time. xp A few times ...

AHHHH the potential! I loved it, its dark, seductive and mysterious. We have got to hook you up with a publishing company. I can see this happening. The way you ...

I rather enjoyed this, I'm very picky with what I read so I've been moping because I've found nothing that captured my attention. I'm really glad I found this, at ...

Hi I found this really confusing and muddled but I think that was more of just being inside your protagonists head than your writing skills. It kind of reminds me ...

Okay to be honest your story is really basic at the moment, their is no description of what's happening around them, mostly all were getting is dialog. You need to ...

Okay I take back the Keagan love interest, doesn't sound like a good match, this guy I can see becoming one, I liked this but as a trained spy she ...

I was hooked. I love it, I'm going on straight to read more! You had great visionary descriptions and I love the skin tight jacket. I cant wait to start ...

I actually really enjoyed this, and I'm really picky when it comes to reading material. I saw short story and though oh yay a whole piece and got left hanging ...

Hi I found this interesting, their were a few grammar and sentence structural errors that can be fixed but you did slip a little between past tenses and in in ...

Hi I think the windows were effective, but just that their was no lead up, if it was because of her temper add something like she felt waves of vibrations ...

I liked this but I felt you ended it abruptly, maybe go back and add a cliff hanger or a strong point to end it on. I also found it ...

Love it. I'm now getting a 'this is set in the future vibe' with Lab experiments, At first I thought maybe her ghost was visiting her mother but now I ...

I really enjoyed this, and the new species, you're beginning to introduce. I have a feeling their going to be important in the overall plot. Jay seems old are you ...

I loved the shrouded in mystery vibe! Jay has so many layer to him, he feels old and wise, but I saw a tiny speck of humour. You can tell ...