Micah

Snoink, why do you always have to write so much?! ;) I don't have time to read it right now, but I skimmed it. Rincewind: OK. It's ok. But, i'm ...

Thanks for the advo. Yeah, I know what you two mean. Robotic speaking is my one main problem in stories, but i'll get there. Maybe give me some suggestions on ...

Yeah, well I did just whip this up for something I was doing, and didn't focus directly on emotional points and such.

I don't know, the rhyming was maybe a bit forced in some of the verses, but the whole plot was quite cool. The freedom thing. Great job, Snoink!

This was unique, as a poem. I liked all the one-line words, cunning, humming, and stunning, y'know what I mean.:) They were great. Keep writing!

There, I think i've fixed it!! Thanks for the advice, guys.

Thanks for all the advice guys, i'll see what I can do...*wanders off to gather inspiration*

First of all, I stopped reading it as soon as I came accross a swear-word. Sorry, but I hate swearing in stories. That's something personal, I think. Write a story ...

Rather confusing, but yeah, i like the strungtogetherwords! Keep it going.

Hey, this is good, Liz. But just remember that to make the poem flow, you've gotta have stanzas that match, or sound equal. Think about syllabals. (is that the right ...

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