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Hi Isha. I have nothing more to say as the things I wanted to say have already been repeated but I would definitely give you hats off for completing another ...

Hi Skins. Here on request. So I will be highlighting the part I liked in green and the one which need correction in red with remarks ahead in bold. Like ...

Prologue: The thought that no one in the world can help you in your greatest need is a great melancholy. It's sad that you will not be able to get ...

Hi Pinkangel. I would highlight the part I liked in green and the part I found forced in red and any corrections would be in different colours. I found her. ...

Hi Skutter11. This idea was really good and well presented. To come up with this topic, to think about doing something like this should be appreciated. But you could have ...

Hi Isha. Sorry it took me so long. I loved the story and I have not much to say. You described everything so nicely and I could feel being there. ...

Hi Masie. I am here as promised. I am loving this story till now. You are painting a very good picture for the reader. Its interesting me a lot. I ...

Hi Amanda. Thats one of my character's name. there were no grammar errors I could detect but yes your writing style is quite easy going with minimal use of high ...

HI Skins. First to the nit-picks: I looked at the empty bottle carefully, hoping that it would somehow magically fill back up . As I stepped forward, I stumbled slightly; ...

The breeze swept his unruly hair away from his face and back again, making the rough strands brush harshly against his skin as he watched the sky from above the ...

Finally I have reached the last part. Loving it! :elephant: So you know what your story will be exactly. Just work on the grammar. Alice scowled in the full-length mirror ...

Hi curiousvampire. This chapter was a disappointment. I am just wondering how come no one else noticed the ton of grammatical mistakes filling your chapter. Straight to the nit-picks: Portersrose ...

Hi curiousvampire. I am here once again. Straight to the nit-picks first: Allowing the grin to crease his emotionless features features before finally sinking his razor sharp fangs into her ...

Hi curiousvampire. I am in total awe. I feel like reading the entire book at one og but that's not possible...you haven't written all. :lol: This story is so romantic. ...

Hi Skins. I am finally here after a long nights sleep. Sorry I got late. I must admit that your writing is getting better than each passing chapter and your ...