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Hello! You definitely have a good story here. I really liked Kathryn's voice and her narrating just flowed really well. She also described her feelings beautifully. Another thing I liked ...

Hi! First of all, I do agree with the previous reviewers that 'Love' seems to be such a boring, non-colourful title for such a powerful piece of poetry you have ...

Hello! Okay, first of all, I have some nitpicks. So here goes: or like a cat with a mouse . get you out of my head . I would think ...

Hi! Okay, so I really liked the tone of the story, the character's voice came of very clearly and it was a really pleasant sort of voice to read. Although ...

Heya! I find that your imagery in this poem was really good and powerful. I also loved how you linked it to nature with the sparrows and butterflies and all ...

Hi! I rather liked your poem. It was simple yet effective. You also wrote it in such a way that it didn't go on or ages and ages saying what ...

Hello! First things first, I really liked what you were trying to say in the poem. I think that it was a really sweet concept. However, I do think that ...

Hi! I think that you have a very sweet piece here. I liked how you put some description between the dialogues, I think that was really good, because we get ...

Hello! I can not agree more with the reviewers above me. They made very excellent points about run one sentences and spaces after commas. I'd fix those up a bit, ...

Hi! I think that this is a rather good poem. Although I'm not too sure how some of the stanzas relate to each other. Like the first two. In the ...

Hi! A fairly nice story overall. You had some really nice descriptions going in there, which is good. However, there are some phrases that sounds a bit awkward or is ...

Hi! I really liked the story that was written and how you started with the present time, but then gave us a flashback straight away. I thought that was pretty ...

Hi! So, I'll start with some nitpicks: Like if you and i would sail The line sounds rather incomplete to me. Sail to where? There's also some little mistakes, like ...

Hello! I quite like the simpleness of the plot and the language you used was very flowy and soft. So, that's all good. However, the beginning came across as a ...

Hi! With the structuring, I would recommend you to divide them up into stanzas, since they could be divided really easily. Like this: Blue skies Sunny skies That's what I ...