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hi there! Happy Review Day and Happy Holidays! What an intriguing title... I feel it ironic how a company founded on the production of baby soap stumbled across the means ...

Really good points Q! I could definitely add some to loop his family in from beginning to end, to really pull it tight.

Aww thanks Ellie :) I actually haven't written in first person or present tense in a long time, but it just felt right for this piece. I'm glad it resonated

Oh and you should look up williwaw

Haha most of those sentences I've pointed out for myself in my re-reada. And YES he's doing a villain slouch. The eggs thing is the saying that you have to ...

Thanks Ole bean. One thing I'm definitely working on is making actions more active such as your suggestion for Alec giving a stern look so good to know it's sticking ...

Thanks for the review! Take your time by all means. I'm currently working on draft 2 which may have some huge changes, so if you like feel free to wait ...

Thanks Ellie. If you don't feel like you can manage all of Williwaw, my Local Tales of the World folder gas more poetry and short stories %uD83D%uDE01

Hey! I did write this in many ways a sea shanty or ballad. Rael is a country in my WiP Williwaw, but the people their are quite romantic about their ...

Haha believe me you're not being picky at all! If you like it so much feel free to go back to the beginning or check anything in my Local Tales ...

Next thing: I know you're getting up in chapters... and I definitely do this too, but the poetic device is starting to disappear. This isn't really something to go back ...

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@icyflame hey is this spam?

@icyflame hey is this spam?

All of that was great haha. In my LTotW I have a few poems set in this universe if you'd like to see more of this style. In short: Rael ...