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Re: Love is cancer
Don't be afraid to write, take in the critiques, learn. Most critiques are filled the critics opinion, but it still has value. Love is horrible,powerful and unstoppable. It rips at ...
Jun 17, 2010 -
Re: Addiction
I really like this poem, Flem. How, towards the end, it started getting jumbled and crazier, mimicking an addiction and how someone needs it. At first I was confused in ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: To the Slaughter, to the Bed
I wrote this after last night, being bored in the local Night Club. The point is very subtle so if ya don't get it, doesn't matter. But I like it, ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: ThinPrettySmartStrong --- Lost
Time for an exciting critique from, moi. The starved body begs that she wouldn't Shove the finger down her throat She's empty Hm, maybe think of a metaphor for a ...
May 14, 2010 -
Re: I can't do it, I can't move on
Hey i originally wrote this as a song but i can't seem to make a melody that fits so i'm wondering what you think of it as a poem. Should ...
Mar 10, 2010 -
Re: Mages
Mages Book 1: The Storm By: Mage Banks Hi, I am really in need of YWS! I’m writing this awesome story and I don’t think I started it off right. ...
Dec 30, 2009 -
Re: Runaways Chap. 1
My brain didn't even register what was going into my bag. I'm surprise d that the(?) damn thing hasn't exploded from pressure over the years. Did you change the tense ...
Dec 29, 2009 -
Re: The Velvet Assassin-Prolouge
This is kind of a baby of mine, although I'm not really too far into it. Please rip it apart though. It becomes a love/adventure story later on so I ...
Dec 29, 2009
