Megrim

I finally got myself here and finished reading! I'll start with my overall impressions and then go back to specifics. Firstly, I'd like to say that your writing is stellar. ...

This is an excellent next step for the story: it's much more human and personal than running from monsters and fighting with fantasy-world powers. It gets back to the elephant ...

Onward we go! I don't have a whole ton to say about this chapter in particular. I liked the new characters a lot so I was rather less interested when ...

Typing as I read again, so you'll notice a disconnect between my paragraphs ^^ I love the thoughts toward agility vs wishing she put points in endurance, etc. Fun way ...

Hi! Here to review as requested. Going to type my thoughts as I read. For starters, the tense is a little shifty. Past tense and present tense both make appearances ...

Ok so! Rought draft with requested attention on pacing! Therefore, no prose comments. I'll type my thoughts as I read and avoid anything narrower than paragraph-level. The introduction is kind ...

Hey there, dropping by for a review as requested. I saw your comment that this meant to be like a prologue, so taking that into account, I think you have ...

Hi there! Finally back to catch up on my YWS reviews... sorry I left this request sitting around so long. This is a very cool start, with lots of mystery ...

Alrighty, last chapter for now! I don't think I have too much different to add that I haven't already said. As far as critique, I notice mostly the same issues--would ...

Back for more, and this time I'll try typing as I read. Ok I think I'm finally getting a handle on the conflict between light and darkness. These angels are ...

Onto chapter 3, and this one's a long one! I like how we're getting some progression of the story; things are happening, characters are developing, more of the backstory is ...

Hi! Here to review as requested. This was a very emotional piece, and I really felt for the MC and their anxiety and self-doubt. Seems like this is a lot ...

Hi! Moving onward. I secretly was already planning to crit the rest of it if I got the chance before you even asked ;) So here I am. Since this ...

Hello there, Megrim here to review as requested, and what a fun story you have here. I looove the imagery of blasting through PLANETS as they fight. I got the ...

Hi! Here to try and review some poetry. I don't have a clue about poetry technique so we're going to go with reader reaction instead. Stanza 1: Ok I lied, ...