Megrim

Hi there! Saw a later chapter in the green room so thought I'd start at the beginning. I have to say that while I hate and skip prologues, I did ...

Poor guy, that Box sounds absolutely horrid. It's got pretty much every element of the worst tortures, even the sleep deprivation. I like how you rearranged things and moved Karliah's ...

Onward! I see what you mean about word count. I think you're already sensing that you have a lot that can be cut. Sometimes it just takes that other person ...

Look what I found in the green room! I find for your story it works really well for me to type as I read, so I'm just going to keep ...

Well, quite the turn of events in this chapter, eh! I think the strongest part of this chapter is the setting, and I looove setting. We get to see lots ...

Yay onto the next chapter! So I'll start with the good. I feel like my thoughts are a bit scattered and unhelpful, because I stayed really late at work and ...

Hi there! Spotted this in the green room and thought I'd dive right in. You have a really fun start here, with lots to like. I was impressed at some ...

This was a decent chapter, and I think by itself I quite like it, but in the context of following a string of other slow, filler-feeling chapters, it's starting to ...

And we're onto the final section of the chapter! A lot to say about this one, I think. I'll say I liked it, but with reservations. I usually make brief ...

Onto the next chapter! I'm of two minds here. There's a lot to like about this chapter. But, it's also a bit slow/filler-feeling. I quite like Julius. Maybe I just ...

Interesting turn of events at the end there... I wonder if she'll make it. I was half-expecting them to show him her corpse or her heart or something. I did ...

Hi again. Another enjoyable chapter, with a nice peek into Paula's life. Much like last chapter, i really enjoyed the events in this one. I thought the description of the ...

Back for more chapters, and this one is another good breather. I found it to be quite a comfortable chapter, with a great setting, and i enjoyed getting to know ...

Onto chapter 2, and we finally learn about the capital P plot and meet the cast of MCs! This is shaping up to be a very fun story, and I'm ...

Hi there! I spotted the next part in the green room, so thought I'd backtrack and start at the beginning, especially since this is sc-fi. Looks like you're a great ...