Megrim

Here to review as requested! (Sorry for the delay) When I first read it, I totally missed that it's a novel. I thought it was a short story / one-off. ...

Onto our latest and final entry! On seeing we were getting Trista's POV, my very first thought was what if the previous section was combined into the first chapter, so ...

Onto chapter two, and the plot ball is really rolling now! I'll go back through and type the thoughts I had in order while reading. I was initially confused setting-wise, ...

Hello, and on to chapter 1! It makes for a good introduction, not only giving atmosphere and worldbuilding, but introducing a thread of tension and a promise of the main ...

I have arrived to critique as requested! And a fun, interesting start to the story this is indeed. It's more engaging than most prologues--I think because it's a real scene, ...

Hello, here to review as requested! Very prompt and timely of course. (I forgot YWS existed for a few months there...) Overall, I think this is a strong opening chapter. ...

Helloooo... So I definitely read this back in Nov or Dec, but apparently didn't actually... leave a review? So ahem. Hello. I like the structure of this story, with the ...

Onward we go into ch3. Again typing as I read. I like the name Wildernoir, btw. I'm finding the beginning to this chapter fairly slow. I feel live I've read ...

Alrighty time for chapter 2! Let's see what's in store. For one, his mother’s flock of sheep had left the meadow and come home for lunch. But to a sheep, ...

Hey there! Reporting to critique as requested. I'm going to type thoughts as I read, so let's get started. My first comment is before I even opened the story: "a ...

Mark managed to dodge security and get Ellie to his to his Fireteam This sounds like an exciting action sequence! Why rush through it? Let us see how cool he ...

Commenting as I read for this one. Starting with the first half, Ellie's emotions are what stand out to me again. As Ellie began to see the carnage of what ...

Hello! I know you requested a review on ch4, but I saw that I looked at ch1 a long time ago, and apparently none of the others (I'm guessing they ...

Hello there! Great story--I really like this. The writing is clean and engaging, the descriptions give us a solid idea of the surroundings without overwhelming the narrative, and we get ...

Hellooo. This is a nicely written and haunting piece of flash fiction (I'd definitively place it as flash rather than short story). I guess I'll go through it in "descending" ...