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Re: Don't Say Yes
Hello there! It's late, so this is the last review I'm writing. Please bear with me if I'm blur or anything xD David lifted me into his arms and I ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: Back to the Corner
Hello there! Oh dear, I'm afraid I won't be of much help because I don't really have any issues with this! It's a lovely read of an aftermath, requiring no ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: Blood On My Hands
Hello there! Let's see what I can do to help! This is rather short, so there isn't much to say except: 1) You switch points of view without clear signposting. ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: I Wish I Was Violet.
Oof, looks like Dudette has covered most of the points. But anyway, hi! I'd just like to reiterate one point she mentioned: While this is intended to be a short ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: When Your Heart Beats (A short excerpt)
Hello! Your piece has been rather extensively critiqued, so I don't have much room left. Anyway, I was wondering if you plan to make this part of a novella/novel or ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: The Doll On The Shelf
Hey there, I won't comment much on this piece, simply because it's a personal thing for you and not something really subject to edits when it's heartfelt. However, from a ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: Seeing Jack
Hey Elinor! :D I'll try not to repeat what's been said already. I’d definitely gotten more into my character then the night before. 'than', not 'then'. Anyway, I liked this ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: Offended People Offend Me!!!
I've got to agree with what BBB said. This is at best a random blog post that doesn't belong in this section, The Lounge maybe, if you're genuinely looking for ...
Dec 13, 2011 -
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Hello! Let's see what I can do for you today! Love, as it turns out, is an overwhelmingly complicated subject , Full-stop? one that doesn't appear to get any easier ...
Nov 12, 2011 -
Re: Maybe.
Ah, this is a lovely piece of writing. As mentioned by others, I can feel the connection between the speaker and the person she's addressing (in this case, the first ...
Nov 8, 2011 -
Re: Cuts.
Hi there! This is rather short, but I'll see what I can comment on and hopefully it helps ^^ Let's go! Yes, like petrol. It seeps in with an assurance, ...
Nov 4, 2011 -
Re: Is it love or another high school crush?
Hi :D I should be doing math so I'll just talk about the plot! Bad: Erm, your characters are generic. The popular quarterback with the gorgeous cheerleader kind of thing ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Before You Know It
Lumiii! I don't think I've ever reviewed anything of yours yet, but I suppose I can always start now! I almost got scared reading some of your points, wondering if ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: My Father was Buried
Ah, what to say. I enjoyed it. I've not read the other reviewers' comments, so pardon me if I'm repetitive! 1) From your previous works and this one, I feel ...
Aug 21, 2011 -
Re: Hypocrisy
Hi there, I'm dropping by for a brief review :) I will only comment on the plot: 1) Originality I liked the general idea of this piece, not the run-of-mill ...
Mar 19, 2011
