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(...Shoot, this submitted as a comment. Could you turn it into a review for me?

"He," because it's a pronoun, makes me automatically try to remember its antecedent. The problem is, it has none in this story. It's just a linguistic oddity in the story ...

Hey! Just wanted to let you know that I definitely haven't forgotten that you wanted me to review this as your reward for winning the contest! I've been able to ...

Oh, thank you. :D That means a lot.

This was really, really helpful. Thank you so much! I've re-written a lot of the story now, actually, and I think your critique is exactly right about trying to pack ...

Thank you very much for the review! This is really helpful. If you have time, I'd love to know what you think of Part 2, but if not, no worries. ...

Yeah, sadly you can't get a notification atm if a writer posts something new. You could send me a PM, but tagging me in a post on your wall/my wall ...

Thanks so much for the thorough review! This really helps. :)

You're very welcome! Thanks for the kind responses. %u263A%uFE0F

Thank you so much! This was really helpful in terms of getting your initial impressions as you read this - I feel like I have a lot more to go ...

Thank you for the review! It was really good to hear your thoughts as you progressed through the piece, and now I definitely know some of the wordings I need ...

No problem! Glad I could help! :D

Thanks for the clarification! That does make more sense :)

You're very welcome! I definitely know what you mean about only having family/friends who are readers. xD All they'll tell me is vaguely "it's good!" and I'm like "...but I ...

Hm, I'm pretty sure I do have a line about that there somewhere, but it clearly needs to be more obvious. :p And yes, yell at me, cause it probably ...