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Concise descriptions are not my strong point, so I'll definitely keep that in mind. Thanks as always.

Thank you as always! I've been really appreciating these reviews. :D

Thank you very much! I'm really glad you liked it. I've already posted several more chapters, so if you want to read on, the links are on the right side ...

Yeah, I got to this part and was annoyed I hadn't managed to slip in the discussion about magic earlier. And fooooorshadowing. :D And you would definitely 510% percent face-plant ...

I'm so glad you're liking Ayda's voice! though you know how partial I am to dragons, especially sculptures of baby ones that are sleeping I put that in especially for ...

Hm, you make a lot of good points.

Re: Ayda's decision - yeah, it's pretty impulsive. It's interesting, because in the original draft, I wasn't thinking of her as very impulsive. But she's definitely turned into an impulsive ...

Yeah, the Kingdoms will be explained pretty soon - I thought including it here would just slow it down. How could that woman make a portal and who is that ...

Ah, that makes sense, thank you. Posting a novel on here is always tricky because quite frankly, works over 2000 words are rarely read and reviewed thoroughly, so you sometimes ...

Ah, I figure that Ayda wasn't really sure what to think before. She'd heard conflicting rumors, that they were all a myth, and that the world was cut off. But ...

I'm sorry, I'm a little confused. Are you suggesting that I should combine this part with the next part or with the previous part? And in what way would that ...

The parents are hard. ;-; This draft is interesting because in some ways the conflict has slowed down - she doesn't have the main fight with her parents until next ...

Yay! I'm glad all the things worked. In some way, this beginning is *slightly* slower paced (it takes 300 extra words to find the girl and doesn't have cover as ...

You're very welcome. :D

How/why did you even find this? This is so old. xD But yeah, the glasses eye implants don't really make sense. I guess I was thinking the eye implants were ...