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Re: Hidden Entity - 2.1 - Red Gas
Back again, finally - sorry about the wait. This was definitely a step up from your previous chapters. Giving us just two characters to focus on and one topic (the ...
Jan 21, 2017 -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 3
And back again, as always. a quick check of the higher planes proved her theory. We know for a fact that humans can't see the higher planes, and there's not ...
Jan 18, 2017 -
Re: Hidden Entity - 1.3 - Argument
I am here at last! This is... interesting. The overall feeling I came away with was that every one, most particularly Terna, was pretty much overreacting. And maybe this would ...
Jan 18, 2017 -
Re: The Siren's Song
All right, let's dive into this. :) Apologies in advance if I don't finish this as soon as you thought I might - I want to give this a fairly ...
Jan 15, 2017 -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 2
Oooh coolio I really like how the dimensions thing makes it so this can take place in the real world without it not fitting with all the stuff that happened ...
Jan 15, 2017 -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 1
I decided I'd go ahead and review these today. :) She loved magic. This opening line and the next paragraph didn't sell me, especially since I already knew this was ...
Jan 15, 2017 -
Re: Al and Gerald
Hey there! Thought I'd stop by to review this today. This is rather good as it is, particularly the beginning and the ending. The opening part in italics did a ...
Jan 12, 2017 -
Re: Hidden Entity - 1.2 - Argument
Hey! Back for another review. Okay, so realizing they're literally arguing about Pluto (right?) was just funny to me because of the whole planet/not a planet argument. I want to ...
Jan 11, 2017 -
Re: Hidden Entity - 1.1 - Argument
Here for the review, as promised. :D I'll admit the capitalized They as a pronoun was a little distracting. It's just the combination of two abnormal things - 'they' being ...
Jan 11, 2017 -
Re: Sea Shells
Back again. This one's an interesting beast. On some levels I really like what you have here, but it doesn't quite make it for me. I read through your other ...
Dec 30, 2016 -
Re: Wax lit streetlights
This is quite nice. Definitely a classic example of taking a simple, commonplace moment and exploring it, in this case driving along in December. That said, I don't feel a ...
Dec 30, 2016 -
Re: The Sun
All right, here's the start of the rest of the reviews I owe you. They'll probably be kind of short, as I'm realizing how much I actually prefer reviewing prose. ...
Dec 30, 2016 -
Re: The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns
I enjoyed this. It kept my attention for the most part - more on that later - and yeah, basically I'm intrigued. Your beginning is interesting. This clearly is not ...
Dec 30, 2016 -
Re: ARK: Survival Evolved, Chapter 1
Hey there! I'm finally here for the review you asked me for a while back. I agree with Jyva - your prose often strays into purple prose. Some of it ...
Dec 30, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 7 (TRYCOLOUR'S P.O.V.)
Hey! I'm here for a quick review this Review Day! Overall, this is really quite good. I think you managed to do the exposition at the beginning well, moving into ...
Dec 29, 2016
