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Re: Quest for Fire ~ Chapter 3 ~ The Howler Dragons
Hey there! I'm back for another review. I really like some of the in-world expressions, especially "suffering serpents' sake" because it rolls off the tongue and is fun to say. ...
Tue Jan 31, 2017 11:18 pm -
Re: Quest for Fire ~ Chapter 2 ~ The Legend is Real
Hey there! I've sort of decided I'm going to follow this novel, seeing as there's so many parts posted and I'm fresh in need of things to review. Hope that's ...
Tue Jan 31, 2017 12:17 pm -
Re: Mysterious Screams (Chapter 2)
Hey there! I'm here for a quick review this Review Day. I won't spend too long on technical things, but I spotted a few typos in this piece, things like ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 10:10 am -
Re: The Epic of James - Part II
Hey there! This has been in the Green Room for a while, so I figured I'd review it. Overall, I felt like the first few paragraphs took a while to ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 8:05 am -
Re: Daegar - Chapter Five of Shattered Crowns
Huh. That was an interesting chapter. At first I didn't like Daegar - he seemed abrasive and a little rash. It might have been the comment about saving the lord's ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 7:34 am -
Re: The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns
And back again. :) This part didn't engage me in the way the last two did. I think there are a few different reasons for that. First is that this ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 7:04 am -
Re: The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns
Back again! This was another good chapter. Honestly, I'd prefer that you break these up into 2 parts because they'd be easier to review, but I can understand that there's ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 5:45 am -
Re: Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns
Hello! I noticed that a lot of these later chapters were still in the Green Room, and I felt like reviewing some more prose, so here I am. I have ...
Sun Jan 29, 2017 5:09 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 10
All right, back for the last one so far. :D (And YES this means I'll have rescued a Hamlet in KoTGR.) Also, thanks for 'liking' the reviews - it actually ...
Tue Jan 24, 2017 2:23 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 9
Well. That escalated quickly. So, we get a name now, Raptor. Although I'm guessing that's not his real name, him being a magician and all. Honestly, he handled that really ...
Mon Jan 23, 2017 10:17 pm -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 8
Okay, so I kinda wish this part was from Barty's viewpoint, but I also can totally get that you couldn't really do his voice justice without it being in first ...
Mon Jan 23, 2017 11:26 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 7
Back again! This part is short and sweet, so this might be a shorter review. I'm also really happy to see the two together again. Something I felt was odd ...
Mon Jan 23, 2017 9:57 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 6
It's Bartimaeus! :D Yay! Also, so she's not Steve. Oh well. And sorry, because this review is mostly going to be a discussion of the mechanics you've introduced and what ...
Sun Jan 22, 2017 8:37 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 5
Ooh, she's in Minecraft! And she's Steve, apparently. I assume. You'd think she'd be able to be Alex, but maybe it's just automatically the default. I really liked how she ...
Sun Jan 22, 2017 8:00 am -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 4
I'm back again. :D I'm liking how you're building May and Herobrine's friendship. Something I will say is that Herobrine feels really neutral a lot of the time, like he ...
Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:24 am
