Masquerade

I liked this piece. It was short, but it got its point across. The voice you used help characterize the speaker, and that was nicely done. For example, always calling ...

I agree with Calligraphy's points. It's quite an interesting story. I got sucked in pretty quickly, which is doesn't happen very often so kudos for that. I, however, have a ...

Hello. I'm popping in for a quick review. I liked this poem, but I agree that it was a bit too long. I loved the beginning. The lines were of ...

Hello. I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your piece today. -ehem- First I'll go through some grammatical edits. Blood trickled down Ryan ' s face as his head ...

Hello, I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your work today. Wow, this was insane. There is so much imagery and figurative language it is bursting. Usually the problem I ...

Hello, I'm Masque. Firstly, welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy the site. Alright, your writing itself isn't bad. You have a fairly good grasp over use of the English ...

Hello, I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your story today. Before I really get into it, there's a few things I'd like to point out. Red = Edits ...

Ahh these are the kind of poems I like. Some people think poems need to be longer, but I'm quite fond of these little single stanza poems. I thought this ...

This is a beautifully written poem. It flowed nicely, and I enjoyed reading it. I don't have a lot of criticism, so here's my commentary. I am Fear. I like ...

Hello, I am Masque and I shall review your story today. I really liked this story. It was interesting and well written. Here's just some things I'd like to point ...

Hello, I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your chapter today. I thought this was an interesting start. There are a couple things I'd like to point out. You had ...

Hello, I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your chapter today. Okay, so luckily for you (or maybe unluckily) I am in a good mood, so I shall go through ...

Hello, I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your prologue. -ehem- This was an interesting prologue. It gave me enough information to be curious without giving too much away. ...

Wow, I really enjoyed this prologue. It was short, but not too short, and it left me wondering, and didn't reveal too much bout the setting and characters. Who are ...

On the contrary, I think it is a beautiful poem. I'm kind of amazed that you wrote it when you were so young. The ideas are simple, but it was ...